I dont know how long you have ben writing. So ima just take it from my full perspective. The idead of it was coo, that was somthing a liked. But you tried to mash to many things into the pie. So just remember these things... Always look at your structure... Produce better vocab after every write... be creative ( which you were )... Take it to another level... Leave something, even one little thing... That people will remember... you feel me... It was OK, but you need work... and im with you, because I stay tryin to elevate...

( Dont take any of this bad, Just constructive, thats how I do aight... return the favor and peep my new open mic im about to put down plz... )

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