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04-07-04, 08:23 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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One Way Trip......
IP: C236 0532
I'm on a bus headed south, head filled with lots of doubts//
Why did I sign? Put my life on the line, freedoms forever renounced// Soon as I step off the bus, I bet I'll get rushed, I feel like garbage// Yellin in my face, tell me I'm a disgrace, they're Drill Sergeants// My arms are fallin off, wish I could call it off and get up// Then they say "On Your Backs" and we all get attacked wit lots of Sit Ups// First time I held my weapon I felt like wreckin a bunch of faces// The farthest targets weren't the hardest pretending they were in there places// They run me into the ground and tell me "Suck it up and drive on"// I can't stop, I'm brainwashed, they fucked it up my mind's gone// They're trainin me to be one of the world's deadliest weapons// Sex ain't far behind but death's whats on my mind every ten seconds// They teach me a trade and keepin me paid for peace of mind// I'm fucked jack, left wit a rucksack, everything else I leave behind// A trip to Germany for what feels like permanently I'll be gone// My heart is racing, start the pacing til I hear a calming song// I know I've made it, I hear the sound of cadance in the air// I've just realized that i had feared guys who just didn't care// After three years it's me up here givin out all the orders// A long way I made it won't deny I hate it but not more than the corners// Back in the day I'd have had my way and stuck it to you// Wanna pop in on us, I fix rocket launchers, what the fuck do you do?//
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04-07-04, 08:24 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: C236 0532
Hit me up wit some feed back................
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04-08-04, 05:16 AM
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~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
rider shit! thats my muthafucking boy!!!
give him some fair response people. he would do it for you. one love. s.v. the kingpin
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 QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE  "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown  R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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04-08-04, 11:40 AM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: B460 32A4
Uppin for some feedback............
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04-08-04, 02:42 PM
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Under Oath
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IP: E034 DBC6
keep it up
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04-08-04, 07:13 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 20B5 2D66
^^^What the fuck??? Can I get some real feedback? God Damn!
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04-09-04, 10:55 AM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 0F7A 2931
I can't believe you bitches can't even hit someone up wit some decent feed back
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04-09-04, 12:35 PM
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IP: FAEF 230F
aight iwas feelin 98% ok wat u said!
u had good flow n u worked it well u came hard wit goot word play n meti'z i liked it but my advise( n its only advise) fink out side the box u no be a lil more creative coz u got skillz so exercise 'em peace
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Know Thyself N Victory Is Assured, For If Man Hasn't Discovered Something2 Die 4, He Isn't Fit To Live |
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04-09-04, 12:41 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 0F7A 2931
^^^ Thanks for the input, but this was a real life experience, that's why it is the way it is.
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04-09-04, 01:57 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 3240 794D
tight shit some hostility there ..lol but that is what the milatary does to you i guess but nice shit though i was feelin it you amaze me every time your elevating like a mad man
one love pimpin |
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04-09-04, 02:23 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 0F7A 2931
^^^ thanks........ Means a lot comin from you.............. lol
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04-09-04, 08:48 PM
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IP: 6517 9617
hey man, i dont know the position ur were in, but the way you spoke it made me feel like i was the one in the boot camp, im in job corpe and i kinda resemble ur situation, that was deep and very knowledgable, keep up the good work.
lil' skip |
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04-10-04, 06:26 AM
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New to RB
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IP: 0358 0BEE
Good piece, used 2 b an army boy myself so im feelin ya!
reminded me of shit i wud rather 4get!lol! keep it up peace out |
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04-10-04, 10:58 AM
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Suspended: Cheating
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IP: 7A52 73B1
that was a dope peice. keep it up.tell supervillain that i proved my innocence to cprogress. overall this was a 9/10. very, very ill. keep droppin.
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04-10-04, 11:30 AM
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New to RB
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IP: 7938 1200
Dope rhyme, man
First, this rhyme had abundant multies which really stuck out, instigating me to keep reading on and on. I guess you could try initiating more multies as it proves excellent in your rhymes, though your already a distinguished and exceptional emcee. Oh and some vocabulary can prove to be decisive at perfecting your skills Stayed on topic throughout the rhyme without barely leaving the topic, and EXCELLLENT job of expressing yourself, give you mad props dog Keep flowing, you'll be BEYOND perfect in a while -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Extra Note-Can you peep my rhyme big pimpin, I'd really appreciate it
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