now elevated by: 708 of... N.O.K.

{look at me... what u see... i'm alot betta den what i use 2 be
i drain niggas quicker den dracula and im stronger den hercuules}

when niggas here 708, they no longer think of MCI
they think of me, my rep, and they see a MC high

open mics roll of my toung quick like spit
i jus get a pen and paper~ and write down shit dats it

i'm done~ not wit rap~ i dunno what u heared~ i'm done wit herbs~
me caliph,ILL,death,hot,troop,dot and prod~ got a way wit words~

why im tellin u dis shit?~ you prolly here bout us all day~ anyway
now who da fuck~ aint here da hot shit NOK bring out~ everyday?

~we damn near been here a week~ and already we got niggas dat speak...~
~..shit about us~ mostly garbage crews ~ mostly niggas we beat~

~now i really don't need...~ ...tryouts from niggas that feed~
~if u cheat, quit rappin ~ and only be a nigga dat read~

{if u kool tryout~ and i'll check u out~ if i got time....
be careful cuz one fucked up line... and u'll be declined...}

yo if u a vet do u think i can be rookie of da month?

1st feedbac on my verse...

...den say if ur gonna nominate me...

if u do dat i'll appriciate it...

~1~

yo uppin 4 some feedback ppl.....

not bad acually its preety good. you are great. yo check my song do you

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Your freestyles written and I bet your beats are cheap/ your pac style spittin' but your flows are weak

ummm lol wuz dat your review or was it jus u fuckin around

yo im hungry for sum feedback

its alright kinda reminds me of my style without all the punches though..lol..was this freestyled or written...it kinda looks written,but honestly you were just makin statements so its kinda hard ta critique if ya get what im sayin...this was more like an intro 4 ya crew..your vocab could be a bit better n your flow more consistent,overall i thought it was good though...check these out...
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