Any given day we stay strapped wit two gats that’ll end your life for a fact//
What we pack you dudes simply lack and we stack our guns wit bullets that explode on impact//
Expect a war when we come wit the four that buss more then a slutty whore//
The 5th sounds like a lion roar and when the eagle bullets soar you should already know your hittin the floor//
Not enough smarts and to much heart makes us grab them hawks and slice ya body apart//
After the slicing get buried in the park that way the cops gotta be Dora and explore to find ya parts//
When the shotguns blast I suggest you duck that ass or end up in a full body cast//
Put niggas on they ass when they talk that trash I make sure a bullet in they gut give em a big gash//
I’m a soldierz so I move at night every step is slight until your right in my sight//
On the building wit the scope waitin for the green light…one shot outta the rifle is all it takes to end the fight//
I move wit the hawk like I move wit a sword so it’s a stab to the neck that sends you to the lord//
Make you like children under the stairs cause your body will be livin under the floor boards//
I’m nothing nice cause I move so precise wit a heater device//
That’ll cause you your life so think twice before you talk and just roll like some dice//
I roll wit angels cause they know my hands are always ready to strangle//
The tech blast leave ya body mangled…and believe me this is true like Kurt Angle//
I shot and aim and leave no more of ya body standing//
My aim is outstanding cause one shot outta the nine will leave a scare of your body like you got branded//

Drop Me Some feed.....

uppin...can I get some feed? I'm given everybody eles feed. Damn!

i'm sorry this isn't really a crit
but you should structure it better
cuz ppl look at ya verse and get woozy

but when they see a name by your post thewy should crit it anyway though

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yo shit is hella wack you cannot rap dogg

w/e nigga...what kind of fuckin feed is that? Even if it was wack tell me what the hell I did wrong..not some stupid shit you said. Battle me...the only way it'll get settled.

yo man elevate no hate...

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there is no hate...well there is. I hate it when people type stupid shit like he did. I understand if he was like I didn't like it..you need to elevate. He types stupid shit.

yer man yah verse was pretty weak i would have to say if u fix yah structure up and get some flow happenin u should elvate more on ya battle then drop some more keys and elevate to the fullest just get real active and practice but mayne yah verse was SHIT no hate

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killing fake emcees like a Isolated~Orphan/
u think u have skills step to me so i can Dislocate~ur~Organs//

just like ya record...nah, thanks for da feedback. I'll battle anybody if they want to.

yea u needa elevate, u got potential, u gotta make ya shit mo complex and wit hard punchez, stay up^

yeah dog u gotta elevate.. not bad for a newb but if u elevate u can get better fo sure

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My Lines Are ILL yo

Better structure... Kinda weak too. It only got worse as I read. The first 2 or 3 bars were pretty good. But ya man, keep practicin. i sucked my first spit too but Im way better now. At least I think so.

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G-Quad Fam
Fab 4 Eastside and the Fab 4 Jrz

yeah it was alrite but u need to work on ur structure. i think u were tryin to fit in too many words so the whole thing wasnt balanced. but jus keep workin on that and u'll get better. i like the idea though