http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/determindmusic.htm

The top song on this link, feedback has really helped so far so I hope you guys can help me get even better. I will try and listen to some of everybody elses stuff tonite. Hit me up if you get a chance-Determined



three of my responses

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=179645

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1989432

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1989480

ariight, listening.....

not feeling how you come into it... its not really you, its just the beat is boring, and ur prescence aint that great... Sounds like your very new to recording, if thats the case, then your on the right track, just keep dropping songs... the verse was kinda short- u changed up how u said that hook thing at the end, or someone else said, i dunno, it sounds more off the second time, and u shoulda faded out the beat instead of letting it just stop abruptly like that-- I think the whole thing all in all just needed more, cuz the beat was weak, sounded like it was missing something, and ur flow sounded very amateurish... keep droppin it though, no hate, just bein honest...1

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I feel lat, I am tryin to take the criticism and learn with it, so if you have any suggestions just holla at me

yea intro is aight ...coulda been better the chorus was great...decent verse..ya flow was kind of rocky at some points but never the less flawless..u doing ya thing..good job..

thanks but I kno it is far from flawless, I got to get better, so be as critical as you can., thanks though

listening...beat is dope

chorus-not feeling it at all..makin ur voice sound like a kid's annd pauses are too long needs sum adluibs n ish maybe
lyrical content-good
flow- on beat most of the timbe but is a lil unsteady in places and falls off

overall- not too bad..mad potential....-6.5/10

Yo can you send me that beat plz - AIM=Acuity2k5 , msn = the_daddy2k4@hotmail.com

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u seem like afraid to spit, kinda hesitant
didnt feel da intro
beat wasnt feeln, it was ight but too repeatative
quality was pretty good, good job wif dubs
u had a few good lyrics
ur flow was basic, u just need work wif delivery and mic presence
and the song ended instant, try to fade out or something next time

5/10

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kidcard7692: cock-a-doodle niggaz
da916_nigga: I hate whites, blacks, and mexicans...but I love my greens
kidcard7692: Niggas dont eat sprinkles
kidcard7692: i just fell going up the stairs

ok no diss, but the beat is boring. and when i hear the hook then i thought the song was gone be really good, but you didnt come out real good on it. but you fixed that up later in the verse. the transition from the end of the verse to the hook was kinda messed up. but like Seventhird said, if u new to recording then you on the right track to becomin hot

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C.S.

...Is to have Served Your Faction

Don't Test- this beat too simple.. (in a bad way) it come off as annoyin as hell

vocals are hella low... you sound very, i mean very distant from the mic, i like the way you said the intro, your flow was fine until you tried to sing, your lyrics are str8. you fell off in a few spaces.. this was kinda short but for what it was you need sum work.. lyrically u aight, just workin on mic presence and how u deliver..

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ok kool, I will try and post another song with a better beat soon, i wish I could get more feedback then just I need to work on my mic presence, like details, but its cool, thanks a lot for all the feed back, peace

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Kool thanks for the feed, I didnt write the hook and in between when it says, "yall kno who we are" it is goin to say the names of the artists on the track, so if you can just ignore the chorus and help me out on the lyrics, peace

aight well chorus ain't bad shit is mad nice you have potential for sure, but you still need to drop more and gain some better confidence when you spitting, the verse is nice, lyrics is cool but you need some more delivery homie

but overall nicelooks keep droppin]


thx for droppping some feedback in my thread

peace

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