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Old 05-31-05, 09:22 AM   #1
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Exclamation Acuity - London State Of Mind.

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http://www.soundstation.com/Acuity.aspx - London state of Mind

word...another attempt at getting hooks down...some shit chattin bout what its like down here...the beat is mainstram but cantr emeber who cos i renamed it...leave links ill RTF

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Old 05-31-05, 09:27 AM   #2
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listenin...


nice beat slow.. i like it..... hook kicks in... i like this nice n smooth, ight now the verse, u always have them big words which makes the flow hard to follow so i aint rlly feelin tht... but the lyircal content is dope u gettin your messege across easy man, quality is good, u can cleary see where the hook kicks in this is a pretty dope track fam keep droppin em... pz
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Old 05-31-05, 09:55 AM   #3
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you have a tight voice for a british cat.... if you pronounce all of your consonants it would help you out a lot

flow's ok... delivery is ok... hook isn't bad (pretty catchy)... i like the laid back approach you have... overall it's a pretty tight track

7.5/10 keep it up
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Old 05-31-05, 01:44 PM   #4
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Old 05-31-05, 10:04 PM   #5
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bump...................
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Old 05-31-05, 10:59 PM   #6
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Damn, I can't stand that UK accent. Shit wasn't all that ass, I wouldn't bump it though. The hook...blah, shoulda re-recorded that part. Just like the verses, the flow was of at most points, some you packed like 49038940 syllables in the lines, shit didn't sound right, most of the dubs were off and shit.
Coulda been a good track if you put more time into it, but nah, not really feeling it.

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Old 05-31-05, 11:01 PM   #7
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Effect on Chorus needs to go......not quite sure what you did, but I wouldn't do it anymore......lol. The best Chorus' I've done were edited like Alcatrakz does in the Alcatrakz Process thread at the top of Audio Assistance

I like the concept behind this. Flow was off a little in a few places. Chorus would be dope if you redid the effects. Second verse flowed better than the first. First verse seemed like you were trying to fit too many words or too little or something.......your lines just sounded uneven. Your rhyme scheme would seem all over the place if I never heard you before, but it's pretty original. I also agree with the person that said you would benefit from pronouncing all of your words better. A lot of English rappers seem to get a mumble effect because of the accent.....by pronouncing every single word, you lose the mumbles.

Good track overall, just needs a little polishing
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Old 05-31-05, 11:23 PM   #8
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yo. now i find myself tryin to give you feedback and i cant listen on these sites, you should e mail this track to me cuz i would love to return that feed to ya... honestly man, i would reply on all ya drops if u had soundclick, cuz ferreal on every1 of my drops im always waitin for u to drop some knowledge, lol im your #1 feedback fan lol.. but yea e mail me tha joint fotwenty@aol.com
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dope shit...complex vocab no basic shit...the flow was dope...i liked the Movie speech thang.that was dope...not the best i seen a little too slow for me..but that just me...otherwise i thought it was really dope....7.5/10 keep it up dawg
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Old 06-01-05, 01:12 AM   #10
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dope shit...complex vocab no basic shit...the flow was dope...i liked the Movie speech thang.that was dope...not the best i seen a little too slow for me..but that just me...otherwise i thought it was really dope....7.5/10 keep it up dawg


i meant this for "Survivor" i typed this shit in the wrong window...lol my bad
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Old 06-01-05, 06:41 AM   #11
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Soundstation isnt a good plays to upload music find another site that gives the option of Hi-Fi and lo-fi
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Old 06-02-05, 04:05 PM   #12
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listenin and returnin favor

aint feelin the accent much but you got a good flow, lyrics are striaght forward and qualitys straight, overall 7.5/10
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