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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

lol...they gotta be kidding me....bt lets get some real votes...not newbies........

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vote u moffuckas...................................

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Voted For: THE NAME


c.ghost

This cat cant b seriuos, im bout ta rock this lame
C.ghost ripped his whole meaning of rap maybe thas why he got no name
^decent punch with personal touch in last line 7/10

Blow past these niggaz like bulls n pistons
stop n listen
C.ghost give a new nigga 0-1, like he tryin to copy the "system"
^haha, very true that last line with the system's record...nice... 8/10

Im lyricly inclined,i rip ryhmes,to go against ya shit lines
These 44's a come afta ya like Mike vick passes, u ka b the reciever to them
^uhm not really feeling this bar 3/10

Now days catz cheatin to win
"The name" aint ready 4 war, he retreatin his men
Its not ur turn,not the season to win
^aight closer 5/10

Total: 23/40 = 57%


THE NAME

shit boy s wack, try to hit me with punches of `` knives for throw ``,
don’t scare nigga cause ur lines already looks like uv seen “a ghost”,
^yeh ghost ppl are hard to play their name off but you did decent 7/10

boy get his sould clapped like pulled hearth off your chest,
change ur E-style to L-style cause that’s how 50 states rebels.
^nice punches with personal touch 8/10

bitch use “the name” play with me, shit that’s old bitch,
its more than old, rotten shit like ur lines and name is*
^solid closer 6/10

Total: 21/30 = 70%

Obvious who won this I think...

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Voted For: c.ghost


This cat cant b seriuos, im bout ta rock this lame
C.ghost ripped his whole meaning of rap maybe thas why he got no name
lol nice opener
Blow past these niggaz like bulls n pistons
stop n listen
C.ghost give a new nigga 0-1, like he tryin to copy the "system"
nice
Im lyricly inclined,i rip ryhmes,to go against ya shit lines
These 44's a come afta ya like Mike vick passes, u ka b the reciever to them
Now days catz cheatin to win
nah
"The name" aint ready 4 war, he retreatin his men
Its not ur turn,not the season to win

uh uh dont hit hard

some of ya punches conected sum didnt ya flow was horrible work on em..............


shit boy s wack, try to hit me with punches of `` knives for throw ``,
don’t scare nigga cause ur lines already looks like uv seen “a ghost”,
nice opener connected
boy get his sould clapped like pulled hearth off your chest,
change ur E-style to L-style cause that’s how 50 states rebels.
nah didnt work wasnt set up nice didnt rhyme
bitch use “the name” play with me, shit that’s old bitch,
its more than old, rotten shit like ur lines and name is*
aight closer...

weork on ya vocab n set up punches better some r nce some arent

vote -the name just
rtf here plz http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206427


Vote switched

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OYD MAFIA

he polled wrong...could u change this................

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still uppin fo real votes...............................

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uppin this.......................................thx for voting...........still need some real votes

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still uppin.....lets get some more real votes.......................

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Voted For: THE NAME

The Name

shit boy s wack, try to hit me with punches of `` knives for throw ``,
don’t scare nigga cause ur lines already looks like uv seen “a ghost”,
decent play on his name
boy get his sould clapped like pulled hearth off your chest,
change ur E-style to L-style cause that’s how 50 states rebels.
doesn't hit very hard
bitch use “the name” play with me, shit that’s old bitch,
its more than old, rotten shit like ur lines and name is*
not that good....it's good for him to use nameplay, do predicting it doesnt help u much

overall- one good punch, other two didnt hit very hard... good personals


c.ghost

This cat cant b seriuos, im bout ta rock this lame
C.ghost ripped his whole meaning of rap maybe thas why he got no name
bad personal, doesnt hit hard
Blow past these niggaz like bulls n pistons
stop n listen
u should've made this one line, and removed the "shit lines" line...
u didn't, tho, so it messed up ur flow a lot... should've made it longer...
C.ghost give a new nigga 0-1, like he tryin to copy the "system"
Im lyricly inclined,i rip ryhmes,to go against ya shit lines
system 0-1 punches are played... shit lines/system is sort of a forced rhyme... same thing as i said on the last bar, should've cut this line out
These 44's a come afta ya like Mike vick passes, u ka b the reciever to them
Now days catz cheatin to win
"The name" aint ready 4 war, he retreatin his men
Its not ur turn,not the season to win
i'ma treat these all as one bar, cause that's how u should've structured it... bad structure on ur part tho, i'm not gonna give u credit for makin these 1 bar just cause i'm treatin them like 1 bar.... good multis/flow, but not the best structure... and u used win twice

overall- u have potential to have very good flow/multis, but what really messed this up was ur structure... punches weren't very good either...

v/the name

please vote on my battle w/stanza (link in sig)

uppin

boy get his sould clapped like pulled hearth off your chest,
change ur E-style to L-style cause that’s how 50 states rebels.

this shit dont make sense^

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C.ghost

Im so ghost........ghost........ghost

Tri state bandit ,50 state rebel





Get soulclapped .............e-style

Voted For: c.ghost

My vote has to go to c. ghost.

It had a lot more flow and it was a lot more easier to follow.

"C.ghost give a new nigga 0-1, like he tryin to copy the "system" Im lyricly inclined,i rip ryhmes,to go against ya shit lines" his was most probably the best punch when considering the content of both.

I do wish c.ghost had played with "now days catz be cheating to win" - he could ended this battle with a really good punch.

The Name was ok but he has a long way to go - it might help him to learn the clauses to help him win battles...

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