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Old 07-29-04, 08:52 AM   #1
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Lightbulb Gimme sum feedbac on this

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Yall say my raps need better structure
Yall feedbac is my instructor,
I thank yall fa lettin me know
If my raps are rite or if they ruffa,
I look to yall fa sum help
Makin sure critasium gets dealt,
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I want to thank erybody who has given me sum helpful feedbac.
An ask dat you keep do it. THANx
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Old 07-29-04, 06:50 PM   #2
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gud.nice to know sumone appreciates feedback.

by the way
I thank yall fa lettin me know
If my raps are rite or if they ruffa
^that line didnt rhyme lol.

structures beta though.
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Old 07-29-04, 08:54 PM   #3
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thnax Mani
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Old 07-30-04, 07:31 PM   #4
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yo gimme sum mo feed bac
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Old 07-30-04, 08:17 PM   #5
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Like Manipulation said, it's good to see you appreciate feedback. Other than that, keep elevating dude. I see your structure is better, too. Now you just need the other shit: meta's, multi's, etc. Keep at it.
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Old 07-30-04, 08:50 PM   #6
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Thanx GFX stay up nigga
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Old 07-30-04, 09:26 PM   #7
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yo sun you ok but you need better metaphores and vocab but your struture looks good
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Old 07-31-04, 12:46 AM   #8
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yea it was koo as hell ey can sum one feedback my shit cus i need to no wat i can do to improve, thx peace
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Old 07-31-04, 01:53 AM   #9
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gud.nice to know sumone appreciates feedback.

by the way
I thank yall fa lettin me know
If my raps are rite or if they ruffa
^that line didnt rhyme lol.

structures beta though.


when actual feedback is given n not emotional stress cuz of constant periods
feedback willl b respected n tooken noted but when u jus tlk shit no 1 cares

no problem uk peeps forget wut feedback sumtimes means though u kno ignorance leaves peeps desperate n forgetful thanx 4 leavin feedback on my shit in da past keep doin ya thing n fuck da hataz
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Old 07-31-04, 06:26 AM   #10
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yo thanx yall keep tha feedbac comin
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Old 07-31-04, 06:31 AM   #11
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Short n dat but overall it was aite n had a nice flow keep it up....peace.....holla.....
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Old 07-31-04, 06:32 AM   #12
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Short n dat but overall it was aite n had a nice flow keep it up....peace.....holla.....
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Old 07-31-04, 06:39 AM   #13
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Thanx JaggyA Keep da feedbac comin
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Old 07-31-04, 07:52 AM   #14
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yeah its gd to know some1 app's feedbac and stuff...........but uhh what u wrote didnt rhyme yo..........anyhow keep it up
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Old 07-31-04, 09:28 PM   #15
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