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07-31-04, 10:56 AM
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Oh! My Child!
IP:
A small child’s lingering fingers caress her mother’s short brown hair… And her harmonious head lies on her mother’s shoulder, with loving gentle care. The child can feel the beating of her Mother’s heart to prove the life is real And the mother can sense the devoted breath of her young, the unexplainable feel. The child’s skin so tender, as the Mother tediously strokes her daughters arm… And the infant feels warmed, as she is confident she is locked from all kinds of harm. Now, the babe’s eyes are closed, and her body secured warmly in a black velvet cloak as her mother’s memories of when fade, and reality from a week ago starts to choke. The mother now stares deep into the portal of her daughter, where she will now be kept And she pulls the black veil from her eyes, and there on her cheeks is where she’s wept. From her shaky hands, she places three red roses across her child’s eternally secured bed and she prays to her Father for her infant to be well, and more tears from her eyes she's bled. With one single kiss placed upon her child’s sincere forehead, she slowly says good bye, And the mother drags her body back to the pews…for once more she begins to cry. Oh! My child… Oh! My child… Your mysterious death has brought us all great sorrow… But now you are in your Father’s home… Where soon My Child, I too shall follow.
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07-31-04, 11:07 AM
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fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
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IP:
damn...dats really deep poem i feel it u really do have skills ma fo real almost made em drop a tear but those i have none left n e ways great poem keep postin i like wut i read n i want 2 read more 9/10 holla back n return da favor peace out mami 1 luv holla back
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07-31-04, 07:52 PM
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Vendetta the K.O. King
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IP:
One of my good friends just lost a baby. This can be so hard, and this was very detailed for real. Still getting used to your writing style, but thats your style - so dont change. You've definatley got an artists view on life, and I always drop in here to see if you got something new. 1
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07-31-04, 11:01 PM
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Light Weight
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IP:
damn...dat was a deep drop...very good imagery...like the way u write ya poems 2...u got crazy skills...keep it comin peace
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08-02-04, 01:05 PM
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Bonecrushing Nigga
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IP:
Ya This Is A Deep Drop Nice Imagery I Like How You Wrote Your Poem
7/10
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08-03-04, 01:27 PM
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$Thug Life$
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IP:
damn that was deep and you are so talented and i like that why cant we talk.
yo check my new sonr to you its called DO YOU and no not in that way peace
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08-03-04, 02:15 PM
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IP:
hey gurl, loved the poem...ya got skill. Keep it up!
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08-03-04, 02:36 PM
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IP:
Keep up the good work!!! Yo not offending u or anything just that some of those lines are off a poem book I read but if I'm wrong-SORRY!!!
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08-04-04, 06:55 PM
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$Thug Life$
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IP:
yo I.Q. i dont think you stole those cuz i knew you brought it from you kno where
peace
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08-06-04, 01:06 PM
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cold cold, keep shaking
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IP:
Yeah man, why is everyone saying everything IQ is doing is fake. I dont get it. PPL were saying her pics were fake, now ppl are saying her poetry is fake, I just dont get why there is no love nemore. The poem was good btw, and i dont think that its fake.
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