i wrote this verse last night while lissenin 2 Games Straight Outta Compton, werd

1st i'll write sum shit and then I'LL PRODUCE
i make these beats fo tha kids like CHILD ABUSE
hide all of ya shit, tha juviNILE IZ LOOSE
i'll push u outta helicopter WILE A NUCE
iz tied around yo neck cuz im a CRIMINAL
sexy az fuck so i alwayz make tha WOMEN DROOL
grade A graduate frum a PIMPIN SKOOL
grab ya hair, hold ya hed down in a SWIMMIN POOL
sayin ya did acid but THERE WUZ CITRIS
stupid muthaphuka, yo WERE'S MY HITLIST
write ya name down and that'll SCARE YA SHITLESS
cuz wen i tie yo ass up in a CHAIR U'LL GIT THIS
2 bullets in tha hed and a PAIR OF SLIT WRISTS
and if anybodys watchin i wont SPARE A WITNESS
25 bullets in tha chest bitch MARRY CHRISTMAS
yeah thats just how im takin CARE OF BIZZNESS

leave sum feedback essays, werd

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R.I.P. EAZY-E

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=134765

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=163970

my 2 links 2 were i put feedback, werd

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WTF, 12 views and no feedback? LEAVE FEEDBACK U STUPID MUTHAPHUKKAZ, lol, werd

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y did he do that? cuz of my sig? i aint ridin eazy's dick, its just that he's my idole an my favorite rapper n all that. were i live EVERYBODY lissens 2 N.W.A and Eazy-E, even tha punk rock kids do. thanx fo tha feedbak neway homie, werd

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that was pretty good
at 1s with the strucutre I was thinking it was gonna be wack

but it had good wordplay and metas..flow was cool too..

dre was better *cough*

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hahaha, thanx fo tha feedback homie, lol, werd

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lol, only on a couple of songz tho. and it wood b kool 2 go down there and just c how its different n shit. i mean, we do gotta lot of crime were i live, but it prolly aint shit compared 2 were u live, lol. werd

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nice job, homie...good multies and metaphors...peAce

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uppin fo feedback, werd

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how tha fuck yall gon sleep on this??? uppin, werd

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im feelin the multies...... and to this beat its laid back west coast style fits..... some of those metas was hella tight but its short and the lines are in a shorter version more for audio than for the text.... but the multies really help the flow.... but i suggest u switch ur structure up a lil without the CAPS

peace

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...The real Renegade before Hova...

you must have a coll dad that knows hip hop...dope

my dad dosent know easy e but shit lay off eazy hes so dope but still hes dope..lol

and for feed...ok first of all dont think your gangsta for this cuz its alright nothing super dope...its alright decent stucture and ncier flow with some good vocab some alright creativity,,but nothing super tigt..