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09-18-05, 07:46 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Summer Rain (Spoken Word)
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I know there is a seperate forum for this but nobody ever looks in there anyway so I figured I might as well post it in here.
Another Spoken Word track I did, originally this was written for a topical battle but I felt it would make a nice piece as spoken word so yeh...this is the result... Summer Rain by Drama Queen Left feedback to Dabatos and BlackMagik
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09-19-05, 12:07 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: C9A2 1C80
Uhm upping I guess...
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09-19-05, 02:53 AM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 7F50 B16E
Sounds like a porno beat.
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09-19-05, 12:48 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: D71E 7859
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And of course you would know that huh... Any constructive feed please?
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09-19-05, 01:15 PM | #5 | |||||
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^lol.
I liked the emotion you had towards the end of the track... I wasn't a fan of the beat you picked, but your story was nice, imagery was decent, your vocals sounded a little weird. Get at me on AIM sometime, k. 1
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09-20-05, 12:20 PM | #6 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 10BC 0CC1
Thanks. I tried mixing it myself, next time I better leave it to people who know what they're doing lmao...
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09-20-05, 04:22 PM | #7 | ||||||
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Umm..yeah I'd know that. You neever seen a porno before?[/dosen't believe you] But the reason I didn't leave feedback beyond the beat is, how could I? It's spoken word. Your delivery is your own and there's no "flow" you rate, so what's there to say? You either like the message of the piece or you don't.
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09-21-05, 11:13 AM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 3522 F5FF
^Okay, I understand...thanks anyway...
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09-21-05, 11:35 AM | #9 | ||||
Given Light
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IP: 1768 36E3
No offense DQ, but it does sound like a porno beat, haha.
The lyrics are pretty dope, emotion is nice in here, I'm feeling it. Reminiscing of last summer, laying still on greenest grass Greyish eyes as pure as glass, unaware it would all pass Seeking for depths of your soul covered by a shell of flesh Playing with an apricot flower smelling so pure and fresh Silently listening to birds’ laughter as I rest my head On your shoulder when you suddenly stood up and said: “Can you taste the summer; can you taste the real life? This, for me, is ultimate happiness: no stress, no strife I won’t experience it again, controlled by this rotten spot Eaten by cancer as my existence been put on time slot” That's the part I liked the most. |
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09-21-05, 11:37 AM | #10 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 3522 F5FF
Lmao...y'all and your porno beats...I liked it *shrug*
Thanks for feed fam!
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09-21-05, 02:00 PM | #11 | |||||||
Ms. Get Gully
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IP: 8A95 F5F4
word my girl droppin that spoken word..NOT bad my first time peepin a spoken word drop and im feelin it...nice Topic nice imagery nice words used..im feelin ya emotion fits well with the topic...But...indeed i do want to hear u on some grimey shit lol...some gut pourin in a poetry polite kind of way lol if thats possible ..lol ne who keep up the good work....just work on quality a lil...i got bad quality too lol imma start lettin somebody mix mines from now on. but ne who ...keep droppin em.
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09-21-05, 02:43 PM | #12 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 3522 F5FF
Thanks girl for real...I'm working on the more grimey, political stuff...it's coming...
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09-21-05, 03:50 PM | #13 | |||||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
its straight the beat choice couldve been better. I think that you got good emotion and imagery is iight. Your vocal quality is kinda messed up, you sound real wierd. But I think its decent. The beginning wasnt that interesting but the middle and the end was better. Just get a better beat and quality and would be pretty good.
Can you leave feed on this please thanks 1 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205666 |
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09-21-05, 08:17 PM | #14 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
Didnt like the beat choice either, but your words were from the heart and genuine,keep workin on it,and keep droppin.
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