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I tried my hand at a love song, and also tried to tell a story bout me and this shorty I used to be with and all...
Verse 1 I got a love, I also got a problem within' and/ All I can do is keep my feelings bottled and hidden/ It began when we was kids, then now it's much diff'rent/ I know you'll hear this, but I hope that you listen/ Once I wanted to tell my feelings, but before expression/ I asked a question, if we could be more than friends, and/ You replied yes then, I got to caressin'/ Your soft skin, while you was up in my ear confessin'/ The way I make you feel and the smile on your face/ That I place, hearts beatin' faster than a horse race/ In that embrace, can't replace your vivrant touch/ First time I called you beautiful your eyes lit up/ It was in your car, by the park when it was just gettin' dark/ Other folks was in they house, then our tounges was in our mouths/ I enjoyed your company far beyond the kissin'/ But when I wanted to say those 3 words difficulty had risen/ You said you don't want no relationship at all/ Unfortunately, that means no relationship with Paul/ As I recall, you was in Jamacia when I falled/ For you, to others love is what it may be called/ Still workin' on a chorus and another verse, but I'm uppin' for feedback. http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=138941 Vote on this and I'll return the favor.
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damn...nice shit homie. It touched me...lol....anywayz...7/10 nice work and keep droppin dawg! By the way, if you get a chance, peep my newest open mic "Why Do I Do It" thanx dawg ~1~
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Thanks bro. Yo peeps I'm still uppin' for feedback on this, so don't be shy.
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Come on folks, hit me with some opinions!
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Still uppin' for feedback, don't be shy y'all
Drop an honest vote. Gimme a link and I'll return the favor. http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=139283 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=138941 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=138907
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nice spit, i was feelin it...keep it up
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Thanks, still uppin' for feedback, hit me up people.
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nice drop peep me n emergin's newest drop....holla back n oh..
im white,black,cherokee indian,german n much more ayt?plus black irish
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j'adore its tight i like the rhyme scheme , its really good , i'm a rocker by nature and my honest opinion is i coudl use that in some of my song i'ght peace out
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good mane...keep up tha good work
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yep dope as fuck... lady cant resist stuff like that... i'll try harder on part two...
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