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Forum: Poetic Scriptures 02-26-04, 01:15 AM |
Replies: 2
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it's free verse, I just couldn't decide on a good...
it's free verse, I just couldn't decide on a good way to break up the lines. uppin |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 02-14-04, 01:31 AM |
Replies: 2
Views: 293
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Story of a Man
there was a man once, who went on a journey. as he walked further along his determined path to nowhere the flowers and grass withered below his bare feet and the sun fled from the sky, escaping... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 12-06-03, 03:19 AM |
Replies: 1
Views: 209
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To Be
I am which means I'll be but that's a question can't you see? to be or not to be for me it's to be if I choose to live but then here no others will be because the can't live with me and if alone ill... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 11-09-03, 05:49 AM |
Replies: 8
Views: 280
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Wow, just plain wow. I haven't read anything here...
Wow, just plain wow. I haven't read anything here for about two months, then I come back and this is the first thing I read. It was almost too much. I might have go on another break after this. ... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-21-03, 07:38 AM |
Replies: 15
Views: 308
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Holy christ, 38 - 7? that;s a crazy record, thanx...
Holy christ, 38 - 7? that;s a crazy record, thanx alot for the replies, always uppin |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-21-03, 07:08 AM |
Replies: 7
Views: 163
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Very nice for a first drop.
i live for nothing...
Very nice for a first drop. i live for nothing so why do i try it seems like everything is one big lie ^^^this is my favorite line. your rhymes were tight, and the rythm was definetly there. The... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-21-03, 06:57 AM |
Replies: 9
Views: 171
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I thought so to, but that's just the way i read...
I thought so to, but that's just the way i read poetry, i read it again correctly and it sounded better. very good format/layout whatever i liked it. peace |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-16-03, 06:46 PM |
Replies: 15
Views: 308
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:50 AM |
Replies: 15
Views: 308
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Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:47 AM |
Replies: 3
Views: 175
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I don't care what its about, it's tight. I can't...
I don't care what its about, it's tight. I can't even think of anything to write about it. keep it up though peace |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:45 AM |
Replies: 5
Views: 244
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I liked it. The repeating motiff never really get...
I liked it. The repeating motiff never really get old to me if it's done well, and this one does. I like the line For every new beginning is just the beginning of the end... It just sounds really... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:39 AM |
Replies: 8
Views: 174
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Very good. Short and to the point, got the...
Very good. Short and to the point, got the message in the number of lines it took, and not to many. By the way, what the hell is that emde? I'm just wondering, i've never seen that done with an... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:35 AM |
Replies: 9
Views: 175
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Message...check
badass...
Message...check badass delivery...check rythm...check rhyme...who cares. I liked this piece overall, but to me it felt more like the notes you make while writing all put together. Just a little more... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:26 AM |
Replies: 10
Views: 202
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Beautiful bit of poetry. No wonder you're 22-2...
Beautiful bit of poetry. No wonder you're 22-2 you pulled some badass rhymes in this drop. I am impressed. peace |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:20 AM |
Replies: 11
Views: 205
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I understood what you were saying but the message...
I understood what you were saying but the message was a little lost on me. I have much respect for the 1,2,1,2 rhyme scheme because i can never pull it off. paece |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:15 AM |
Replies: 7
Views: 195
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Badass picture, extremely badass drop. I can see...
Badass picture, extremely badass drop. I can see how the picture influenced you, I thought the imagery of the one white rose was CRAZY good. The text color made it all the more powerfull, very... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-13-03, 01:07 AM |
Replies: 16
Views: 302
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I really don't like to copy what's other people...
I really don't like to copy what's other people have said but once again, you hit home, except i'm at your point of view. I'm Not a mad girlfriend, a guy who doesn't his friends to get all fucked up,... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-09-03, 05:58 PM |
Replies: 15
Views: 308
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Thanks much, I just actually read it and realized...
Thanks much, I just actually read it and realized how well some of these things worked. I usually just write and don't pay attention to it. I usually don't edit either. thanks alott, peace. uppin |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 09-08-03, 12:14 AM |
Replies: 15
Views: 308
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Deepset of Sleeps
Hey everyone, long time no write here goes The Deepest of Sleeps As sleep envelopes me, I fall into unconsiosnous, Twisted and broken images pass by as i tumble into the infinite darkness, Images... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 07-26-03, 03:40 AM |
Replies: 22
Views: 372
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Varentao, I would just like to state for the...
Varentao, I would just like to state for the record that you are an extremeley badass writer, my writing is like a ninja, your writing is like 5 ninjas, all on fire, with flaming swords, then those 5... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 07-25-03, 05:40 PM |
Replies: 4
Views: 406
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Forum: Rhetorical Insights 07-13-03, 07:35 AM |
Replies: 12
Views: 4,887
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my first rhetorical insight
i just let it flow no...
my first rhetorical insight i just let it flow no editing freedom in a land full of dread with clouds that cry tears of red searchin for your fears while they constantly near sneaking up behind... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 07-13-03, 07:20 AM |
Replies: 4
Views: 406
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Requiem for Hope
Requiem for Hope Peace is but a shadow of death, Desperate to forget its painful past, Though we hope for promising years, After shedding a thousand tears, Yesterday's sorrow constantly nears, And... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 07-13-03, 06:50 AM |
Replies: 8
Views: 175
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Daaaaaaaaaamn! I am eternally, extremelly,...
Daaaaaaaaaamn! I am eternally, extremelly, undeniably, and unbelievably impressed. You have a story telling ability. Obviously the endings was good, but it was sweet how you mentioned the dirty walls... |
Forum: Poetic Scriptures 07-13-03, 06:40 AM |
Replies: 8
Views: 176
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B-E-A-utiful. to me, you've captured in one poem,...
B-E-A-utiful. to me, you've captured in one poem, what would take volumes upon volumes of text to describe. For some reason, it reminded me alot of William Blake's "Songs of Innocence" and "Songs of... |
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